Thursday, March 30, 2017

description 2017 term 1 week 9

Purpose: to inform
WALT describe with clear and interesting details
Success Criteria
  • Quick plan to prepare for the writing task (brainstorm with words or ideas)
  • Interesting beginning and ending
  • Using the senses (see, touch, hear, smell)
  • Includes strong descriptive words (adjectives)
  • Uses the present tense


Examples: Bamboo Forest / Scene Description by Dylan / Scene Description by Sophia


Writing Task: Describing a special place in Hawke’s Bay
Lue’s lookout


My Quick Plan: bright lights,dark,squishy wet dirt,windy,the wood creaks,
Trees, bushes
Image result for lou's lookout


Lou’s lookout : A Special Place In Camp Kaitawa.

There is lots of laughter when we arrive at lou’s lookout. Everybody is shining there headtorches when we set off to find lou’s lookout. There was brown as chocolate syrup mud,the trees look like christmas trees everybody felt festive. Sharp as a dagger sticks poke out of the trees. One person slips on the chocolate syrup mud and doesn't seem to care. We all copy purposely and start laughing our brains out. Suddenly We see a couple of wooden planks lend up to something I looked up and it was lou’s lookout!! We went to look at the beautiful view in groups. The view was amazing! Bushes high and low. You could see the clear blue lake. Hills for miles and miles. It was the most hideous In a good way sight I've ever seen in my lifetime. And the platform you stand on makes your tummy rumble It's that high! It looked like the whole world lakes and oceans were right in front of me. That sight was the most scrumches sight I've ever seen.


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